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The Grinch
11-02-2005, 05:42 PM
your comments please
GreenThumb
11-02-2005, 05:53 PM
Are you required to adhere to a 2-color logo by them?
The Grinch
11-02-2005, 05:59 PM
Yes. And they want to see yellow and black only
chalsema
11-02-2005, 06:19 PM
Hmmm I'd lose either the butterfly or the sun. There's too much going on with both of them.
Good call chalsema. What might be kind of cool is to make the "S" in summer the body of a butterfly (in profile). Just a thought. *grin*
Mynock
11-02-2005, 07:10 PM
If you made the sun look like a flower you could put the butterfly on that. You should be paying me for this advice.
PersonasBinar
11-02-2005, 07:11 PM
Here have some chocolate body paint then
yes the butterfly and sun are conflicting for attention. The sun obviously wins, therefore making the butterfly redundant. I think the typeface is quite good, however i would reposition the small type, or stroke it (like you've done with the larger type) so that it doesn't interfere with the sun.
Mitch Wood
11-03-2005, 08:01 AM
First off we need a little more info to constructively crit a peice. Even if you outline your brief this would be cool.
Sorry for the lack of depth but my comments are:
far too busy, far too generic, scaling would be a problem (also watch using tight keylines as this a thing I try to avoid in all logos), too much going on.
Oh yes, the type - try working the elements together and pay attention to your kerning, it just doesn't flow overall. Personally I would use something a little more, well...
...less Comic Sans.
Seriously try and grasp what this place is about, I just feel you need to work it through before you look at execution.
Good luck.
i dont think it is comic sansy at all. but yeah i agree the kerning is off a little, the gaps between o and u, and the u and m are not consistent*.
Mitch Wood
11-03-2005, 12:42 PM
i dont think it is comic sansy at all.
Point taken, maybe it's a second cousin to comic sans sister in law - Tekton? ;)
chriscrooz
11-03-2005, 08:28 PM
OK so I'm going to take shot at this and maybe be able to help explain some of the critiquing through what I've been learning in my design class in the past few weeks.
Because the natural eye looks left to right there is a conflict with the small butterfly and the HUGE sun because of placement. Now i'm not saying that you can't use both in this piece but placement might be better if the SUN were on the left, and aligned in the same way w/ that cool offset. Then put the small butterfly on the end of the "e" on Playhouse w/ the same scaling size. Contrast has a LOT to do with this piece being effective, especially when you're limited to colors.
Try those out and see if that works, also keep an eye out for the alignment of the pieces along with balance. With all that I really do like your direction and believe with a bit of tweaking you could have an effective piece.