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garrfoster
11-20-2005, 06:23 AM
Local band, low budget, needed something simple. White and Red so the printing costs will be cheap combined with the fact that I know some people who can get the cost lowerd more
http://img513.imageshack.us/img513/3313/mockflyercopysmall6et.th.jpg (http://img513.imageshack.us/my.php?image=mockflyercopysmall6et.jpg)
Rip it up.
I've had people say that spacing out some of the letters in the typography would do it some good. If that's the case, I will fix that but I'd like to receive some feed from you all.
I used a stock photo but I had two ideas for it. The lead singer would replace the large, right image. While the other band members would fill in the smaller pictures.
The other Idea was to equally print the same design with each band member showcased.
First post btw. To the owner of the site, great community you have here.
Digital Redesign
11-20-2005, 07:14 AM
Spacing would be good, it was a little hard for me to decipher at first. (especially "the door")
The website isn't there...
Always put a date on it because it's really annoying since posters get left up for months.
Move the line under "empty" down a little, so it doesn't look crossed out.
Consider making "empty" black. (maybe too cheesy. Just a creative suggestion)
Overall, good vision depending on the band.
garrfoster
11-20-2005, 07:26 AM
Thanks alot Digital..
I'll work on the spacing in the morning...I've been working on stuff similar to this for the last few hours and it will more than likely haunt my dreams when I fall asleep. How torteous this business is! And I haven't even made it out of college yet...
Good point about the Date, I'll be sure to put that on there.
The site isn't up yet because their current web designer is re-designing it. He should've made an under construction splash page but he wasn't thinking. That's why they've got me working on some mock pieces for them.
The empty being black could help add some balance to the overall image, that's a good idea, thanks.
I like the design ... it's reel purty ... except I cannot decipher what the band name is. (After a bit of staring at it Running On Empty?) A flyers main objective above anything else is to convey information - this one kinda fails. I don't know if a fan of the band would recognize the name more easily but I did not see it right away. Insert the band member pictures, and make the word Running? more legible and I think you have something. Also you may want to add the date somewhere, not just Friday.
Welcome to the forum :D
I like it, only kinda hard to read, i think its important to be legible, especially if it announces the location and details of the event. this MAY be fixed, if you space out the letters slightly, and as for the "Second" idea, i think it would be much better to showcase the band members if is possible, and as long as the images are good quality.
anyways, as for the letter spacing, its only the top 2 words i have difficulty reading.
anyways, good work, and once again, welcome to the forum, hope you enjoy your stay :)
GreenThumb
11-20-2005, 10:28 AM
Remember, your work should be functional before its "pretty". I like the design fine, its the typography that bothers me. I looked at it hard for 20 seconds and tried to decipher the what, where and who of it and then gave up; a courtesy that will not be extended to you by the average person walking on the street.
vtwin_gary
11-20-2005, 01:37 PM
unless that is the band's logo (if so yuck) i would work on making it more legible. it looks cool the way it is but.... you get the point
garrfoster
11-20-2005, 03:34 PM
I'm assuming the only difficult word to read would be "Running" The spacing and layout of the text makes it difficult to read what it is. I'll fix that. Also, do you think it would help to remove the paint splash brushes? I like the feel it gives but it could help legibility. I'll be sure to work on that, thought football is on today :)
Thanks for all the feedback everyone, really appreciate it. And for the warm welcome.
GreenThumb
11-20-2005, 05:31 PM
I think the splatters work, it was the backwardsish R of the running on empty that threw me off.
Thomas51471
11-20-2005, 05:31 PM
Also, the very top face that is turned side ways looks too much like an afterthought to me. Either take it out or work it into the design better.
All the other typography mentions also go for me too -- especially "running" being very hard to read.
All the other typography mentions also go for me too -- especially "running" being very hard to read.
Yep. Other than that i think its cool.
garrfoster
11-21-2005, 03:27 AM
Thanks guys. I really am going to work on this, devoted my entire day to football :).
Cowboys won, Buccaneers won. Good day.
mylkhead
11-21-2005, 07:20 AM
I like the poster - the typography I like - it's just the angryblue splatter brushes slapped on there is what bothers me. Angryblue splatters are like lens flares. I use the brushes myself, but in subtle ways. Not just stamp the brush on there. I see a lot of designers that do that and it bothers me.
Anyway, I like the typography. I couldn't read the band name at all, but I could care less. It might help to improve the readability so people can look up the band if they want. Otherwise, it's cool bro.
steve-o
11-21-2005, 01:25 PM
Also, "Running" in your poser has three "N"s.
But running does have three Ns LOL
reuber1
11-21-2005, 01:43 PM
Cowboys won, Buccaneers won. Good day.
C'mon, you forgot "Bears won." :p
I agree with the others; work on your type. Include a precise date for the event. Use fewer splatters; even with just a few you can get that "imperfect" (dare I say "grunge"?) look without being overbearing with the effect.
steve-o
11-21-2005, 01:55 PM
But running does have three Ns LOL
When you spell it that way, Kool, it makes much more sense. :)
Amandy
11-27-2005, 01:47 AM
Maybe make the font for the door the same as for what you used for the time. And just a thought since i am from the dallas area there are two door locations one in fort worth and downtown dallas and one coming in plano you might want to find out which one they will be at and include that also in the flyer.
Tell you bro good luck with his band the door is a great venue to play at seen many great bands there.
You are right about running with it being the problem word. Once you read running the rest is easy to follow kind of a cliche statement
Hope this helps hope to see the changes you made