new work

[jacambece]

so i just started doing design, planning on furthering my education with it, but i had some homework to do and this is part of what i did. How did i do?

http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y33/godmode21/th_inflamesbwcopy.jpg (http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y33/godmode21/inflamesbwcopy.jpg)
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y33/godmode21/th_lynncopy.jpg (http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y33/godmode21/lynncopy.jpg)
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y33/godmode21/th_Grindcopy.jpg (http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y33/godmode21/Grindcopy.jpg)
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y33/godmode21/th_shotdowncopy.jpg (http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y33/godmode21/shotdowncopy.jpg)

I like feed back so i can get better.

Cambece

[morea]

what was the assignment? We could probably give you better feedback if we knew what the brief was.

[reuber1]

Yeah, what morea said. But I was immediately drawn to Shot Down Sun at the bottom.

[Logo-Mechanix]

Are you a lawyer? just curious. Maybe post a link for the images so we can see them in a larger siz,e at this size its hard to tell. From what I can see the illustration is looking pretty good.

[morea]

if you click on them they open a larger version. ;)

[reuber1]

Logo, each link is clickable.

Ah morea beat me to it.

[Logo-Mechanix]

Ha, Ha I didn't realize that, hey its tuesday. Thanks Reuber.

[reuber1]

"Everybody gets one."

**flies off**

[Logo-Mechanix]

Now that reuber has enlightened me to actually try clicking on the image, duh, I really like your illustrations you have a great style. I love this kind of work, you definitely have talent and that can't be taught but I would still like to know what the assignment was.

[morea]

in number one I think that the text is competing to be read with the illustration beneath... especially the line that begins "Doors open..."

My eyes get a little buggy trying to read the all caps text on #2, but I can kind of see how that might be what you were going for. Maybe if you increased the leading a little bit it would make it easier on the eyes.

I like your illustrations though. Nice job, especially for someone new to design!

[reuber1]

in number one I think that the text is competing to be read with the illustration beneath... especially the line that begins "Doors open..."

My eyes get a little buggy trying to read the all caps text on #2, but I can kind of see how that might be what you were going for. Maybe if you increased the leading a little bit it would make it easier on the eyes.

I like your illustrations though. Nice job, especially for someone new to design!You know, when you're not posting horrible jokes, you can lend extremely constructive crits. I don't understand why people can't post a constructive critique like this instead of insisting on being a high-horse, pompous elitist.

[morea]

lol, thanks. It almost makes up for the bad jokes!

But not quite. ;)

[typographics]

jacambece,

i love those illustrations! as you continue your education in design, you will learn about type setting and layout. i just wanted to praise your art skills.

matthew~

[trav_o]

in the first one, I don't think the typeface gels with the artwork.

photo is all dark and menacing, font is 9-5 accountant (who is probably a bit of a deviant after hours) {i may be reading into this typeface a bit too much...}

I agree with morea - the text shouldn't be all over the photo like that - let the image breathe, it is capable of doing a lot more work.

[try to move all of the text to the bottom half of the poster and move the pic up a bit.]

If you're looking for funky fonts (for school work...) visit www.daFont.com/en they're pretty damn cool.

in the second one - don't forget to do a spell cheque (ok that was intentional).

Never is interfering with the sketch and vice versa..

Perhaps keeping the style of illustration the same for both drawings would maintain a look.

Font doesn't really work - make it smaller, open up the leading and play around with the kerning.

on the third one - I'm liking the interaction between typography and subject matter. good.
Never be afraid to experiment - print one out on a lazer printer and scratch it with the side of a scalpel - you could get some interesting degradation of image.

also try making photocopies through crumpled plastic, baking paper etc, or flick a couple of splats of red ink over the finished piece.

in the fourth one - hmm... I don't like the different type faces.

I can't get a feel for it.

The red is certainly striking, but what does it say? What is the meaning of the star bursts? Why does the 7 have more impact than the name of the band?

It's kind-of constructivist in look, does that reflect the music?

[rockem]

The images could work and you have some illustrations skill, but your typography is hurting your design alot, study typography more. Heres a few band poster sites for reference.

http://www.aestheticapparatus.com/
http://www.gigposters.com/
http://www.thebirdmachine.com/
http://www.methanestudios.com/
http://www.theheadsofstate.com/
http://www.thepatentpending.com/
http://www.seripop.com/
http://www.factor27.com/index.shtml

[jacambece]

sorry for taking so long i got caught up in some stuff and havnt had time to check my e-mail or go online for a week. the assignment was to create flyers,cd covers, an ID Kit, a menu and read some books. i did them all and those were my first drafts, for the most part the flyers changed the inflames one is now easy to read and less cluttered and the white one is gone i couldnt find a way to make it work, too many things going on for me to make it work and still get the fallen soldier thing going.

and thanks for the links and critique

[max_nhk]

I like the skeleton soldier, would personally prefer a rifle instead of a stick.

I like the zombie too! I bet I was a necromancer in my last life.

Agreed with rock, typo seems like your weakest link.

[Jason Fraker]

Typography is really where you seperate the sheep from the goats. You can have a good eye for layout and illustration, but if your type sucks, you suck. Luckily, typography is a learned skill and the other stuff seems to be inborn. You've got potential to be really good at this. Now, go read about type and don't forget to post often. Good to have you here, jacambece!

[Navian]

Just remember not one specific book about typography is right about everything with in typography.

[Jason Fraker]

true. It's a case by case basis. I suggest, for starters, Robin Williams's "The Non-Designer's Type Book".

[Mitch Wood]

true. It's a case by case basis. I suggest, for starters, Robin Williams's "The Non-Designer's Type Book".


There is only one book for a good insight to type, have a look at stop stealing sheep.

http://www.pearsoned.co.uk/Bookshop/detail.asp?item=212243

p.s. Reuber1, chillout, try and worry about how you crit, and others can worry about how they crit.

“The truth hurts like a thorn at first; but in the end it blossoms like a rose”

Samuel Ha-Nagid C.900

[reuber1]

p.s. Reuber1, chillout, try and worry about how you crit, and others can worry about how they crit.I chilled out over a week ago. Thanks for the update. :rolleyes:

There's truth, and then there's truth with a dose of an ass-hole attitude, which is totally unnecessary. Read Kool's new sticky in the showcase.