Soulful Toilet Bowl - rnd 1

[elmerone]

See CD Cover Here (http://www.704one.com/elmerone/archives/2006/01/soulful_toilet.html)

Pretty much took the client's idea and made it happen. Any thoughts?

[uncle carbunkle]

1/. welcome to the forum.

2/. the 3d text bit doesn't work for me - i think it's the perspective. it's opposite to the perspective of the toilet.

3/. the colour of the text (3d bit) might need to stand out a little bit more. kind of 'samey' right now.

4/. the patern and the stripey bit are conflicting for me. not such a big deal, but i find the pattern over the toilet itself distracting. perhaps if the toilet had a bit more 'oomph'?

5/. and finally, "ew". what up with the toilet bowl!?!

thansks for posting. you'll more than likely get more reviews over the course of the evening and tomorrow if you bump this. (it's a work-day forum).

[elmerone]

Thanks for the welcome uncle carbunkle. I forgot to mention this is my first post here - and I plan on many more! =)

To respond to your comments:

I wasn't going for the "3d" effect with the type. I was actually trying to play off of the angle of the top of the toilet - but now that you brought it up - I do see it as 3D. I think now that I can see it - I'll try to make the type appear to be coming from the toilet! How pleasent! By possibly taking the main text and right aligning instead?

The "color" of the 3d type - I'm assuming you mean the outline/shadow - are mearly meant as a way to pop the white type more off the background and give it some style.

The toilet having more ooomph seems to be a common suggestion among those who've seen this - I will work that some more.

And "what up with the toilet bowl!?!" ... haha - yeah I know. Somehow this guy came up with that name - soulful toilet bowl - and wasn't about to let me talk him out of it! =) So - I did the best I could with what I had to work with.

[reuber1]

I don't mind the "3d"ish effect of the text, but I agree that the color of the stroke on the text is a little similar to the rest of the piece. And I also think that toilet should be jumping out more...with instances of that graphic running across it, it seems kinda hazy; unless the impression you want is what it looks like when you're hazy-drunk and you need to puke and your puke destination is the toilet. Then it works. :D