rough draft

[rjphotograph]

Tell me what you guys think of this album cover

Sorry I havent posted in so long, i have been so busy with work

Thanks


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[Benjamin]

I don't think the photos work so well with that kind of font. Maybe put in a bit more illustration?
Mind you this kind of music is not something I'm familiar with.

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[Eraser Nubbin]

have the photos been stretched?

Match in the gas tank, boom boom.

[DeleteYourself]

Honestly, I'm not really feelin' it.
Some constructive criticsm:

(I know it's just a rough draft, but some issues need to be ironed out, so here goes.)

1. The semitransparent image of the group over the skyline gets muddy and ambiguous. The images are okay, but they need to be arranged in a more appealling way. Try to let each image stand on its own, or choose one image to use and shelve the other one.

2. I see that you're going for the graffiti look, which is fine judging by the image of the group, but you may want to consider hiring an actually graffiti writer, or perhaps an ex-graffiti writer-turned-artist (there's plenty out there...right Benjo?) to make you something that looks more authentic instead of using a font. Also, the arrangement of the text looks sloppy.

3. The layout is too chaotic. The strip of headshots is good, but you should devise a grid system for the rest so that certain elements line up in key places so that the eye knows where to go.

4. The illustration for the word 'Hit' doesn't work for me. It looks like a Christmas ornament.

Btw, this critique is meant to be honest and helpful. I think you're off to a good strart, you just need to clean it up and organize better. Good luck!!!

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[rjphotograph]

ok here isthe second version
tell me what you guys think of this


http://www.rjphotograph.com/images/introbanner_copy.jpg

[ylaenna]

I like the colors but the layout still feels chaotic to me, like DY said, kinda like the objects were sprinkled across the card.

So I was thinking about the graffiti look and came up with a graffiti wall. What do you think about having it look like an actual brick wall that the words were sprayed on? Maybe even add an effect and brick pattern overlay to the photos, take out the lines between them, to make them look like they're street art as well. Make it all look like chalk or spraypaint. Just a thought.

Or check these out for inspiration.
This one is pretty non-graffiti but I think is organized pretty well: http://www.graffiti.org/index/plakat_duzy2.jpg
And these are just pretty http://www.graphicdesignforum.com/emoticons/icon_mrgreen.gif

http://www.graffiti-art.com/phonodrome/photos/codeak07.jpg
http://www.sohobooks.net/bobnew/muralgallery/msgmultitag.jpg
http://pantransit.reptiles.org/images/1996-07-28/graffiti-cycle2.png
http://uploader.wuerzburg.de/b-hof/bilder/art/gra5.jpg

I think a little texture would help the look of this piece. Good luck! http://www.graphicdesignforum.com/emoticons/happy.gif

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