Personal Logo Project - Critique Please!

[syberwolff]

I'm in a Graphics Design and Visual Communications class at BOCES(Vocational Training School) And were on our second project. We have to make a personal logo in Adobe Illustrator that we will be putting on the bottom of all our work for the year, Here's mine: Theres a few minor details I'm going to be chaning but this is the general design of it.

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v395/SyBerWoLff/JDiPLogo.jpg

I'm going to close the line on the bottom of the D, and increase the opacity of the boxes below the " i " so that it's more legibly an " i ".

Comments and critique welcome :D

[MD]

Are these 2 separate designs?
What letters am I supposed to be looking for?
JDPI?

[budafist]

Maybe you should make the changes you plan to make. I'm not sure where the "i" is. I have my suspicions though.

[peder]

I'm sorry, but I don't think the design makes up for it being hard to read. The combination of white with a stroke and hard dark blue don't go well together, and having those three extra colours don't add anything (if I got you right, you're making them solid blue?). Having type in cursive in a logo should have some reason, such as implying speed for an example. Having cursive on this logo don't serve a purpose at all? I really think you have to simplify this alot.

[morea]

you might find it helpful to stick to plain black and white to make sure that the concept is strong before you add any color. It is a bit difficult to read right now.

What do you want people to think of when they look at your logo? I mean, what do you want them to associate with your company? That's a good place to start. I find it helpful to brainstorm words and then think about how to work those concepts into the logo.

[(gra-ph!c-D'sig-nah)]

I hope this is two different ideas because if they go together...STOP! You mention an "i", where!? Thumbnail, brainstorm, jot-it-down, scribble, and come up with a new idea. Think outside the box. You project is not to just do something simple, express yourself! If it is a personal logo for class, show us who you are....

[syberwolff]

The " i " is where the 3 shades are (That was the teachers idea actually I didn't like it). It's not supposed to be a 'cursive' it's more of a modern type I thought. and it's supposed to read "JDiP" I know the " i " is extremely hard to find. I actually had the top part of the white (where it's stroked) a solid colour like in the middle so it had a little cap on it and the teacher told me to do the stroke effect and I did it and i'm like "Ehh.. No" and shes all "I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU DON'T LIKE TI!" and im like "whatever..."

Here was my original design that I had sketched out:
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v395/SyBerWoLff/OriginalLogo.jpg

One thing on the sketch that I couldn't get to work right on the design was that on the D I wanted the points to come meet the intersection into the "iP" but I couldn't get it to extend down that far so I went for the gradient (which I know looks like crud)

[cornfed]

Does your logo have to be jdip or can it just be a self expressive mark? I don't see anything that tells me about "you" either except that you probably like blue. These letters aren't attractive. The thickness of the D is awkward, the J looks weird with part of the top being overly long and the i and the P are in their own little worlds. I don't mean that offensively, I mean it honestly. If you want JDip, then there are a lot of other ways to do that too! Off the top of my head, I picture a ladle shaped like a j dipping into something. Just cutting out the J and D leaves you with a J and P letter combination. There are a ton of solutions - that was crappy examples, but you get the idea. Relax and brainstorm!

[syberwolff]

:P Okay I'll see what I can thikn up over the weekend. I was just looking to do something simplistic. I'll brainstorm over the long 3 day weekend :P

[budafist]

Mmmm....there's nothing attractive about the shape these letters make. Think of a concept first and then try to illustrate this.