My magazine

[gbrown]

As some of you guys may or may not know, but all semester I have been working on a magazine for my publications class. The magazine is FINALLY done and I wanted to share with you guys. Hopefully it looks like a real magazine.

Front Cover
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y171/347stroker/finalmag.jpg

Table of Contents
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y171/347stroker/finalmag2.jpg

pages 4-5
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y171/347stroker/finalmag3.jpg

pages 6-7
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y171/347stroker/finalmag4.jpg

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pages 8-9
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y171/347stroker/finalmag5.jpg

pages 10-11
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y171/347stroker/finalmag6.jpg

pages 12-13
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y171/347stroker/finalmag7.jpg

pages 14-15
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y171/347stroker/finalmag8.jpg

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pages 16-17
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y171/347stroker/finalmag9.jpg

pages 18-19
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y171/347stroker/finalmag10.jpg
pages 20-21
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y171/347stroker/finalmag11.jpg

pages 22-23
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y171/347stroker/finalmag12.jpg

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pages 24-25
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y171/347stroker/finalmag13.jpg

pages 26-27
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y171/347stroker/finalmag14.jpg

back cover
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y171/347stroker/finalmag15.jpg

[Booger]

Very nice! I like the "Von Dutch" pinstriping that was added. Fits perfectly with rods. I'd like to find some in vector (or I guess create some) to cut in vinyl one day.

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All the pinstriping in the magazine are vector, it really wasn't that difficult to do. And i thought it really gave it that hot rod feel. Thanks for the nice words.

[fingerPrint.Design]

I do over all like the piece, however there are quite a few problems with it.

Cover) On the cover, the back wheel of the 32 roadster, is that a stick or piece of grass haninging over the wheel? Take that out. Also in the rear window, is that a person in there? The roadster should also be tweaked a bit more, the detail of the roof in the back and the hood gets lost in the white.

P4-5) In the what were all about section the text goes around the image really funny. You have bad rivers in that text as well. You also have a widow in the first paragraph of that section as well as the other side with the engine.

P6-7) Is that whole first paragraph a different point size? Could just be my screen. The last sentence on the first paragraph that ends at the top of the second column, no good.

P10-11) The headless person at the front of the car, can you take him out of that, its kinda creepy.

P12-13) Is there a type size issue with that first paragraph again? Are all paragraphs like that? I dont think thats working for you.

P14-15) Now I love that car, its really amazing, but the broken down rusty truck, blue tarp and big garbage bag looking thing are not doing anything for me, photo shop that beaut into a kick ass sceen. Plus the dead grass kinda crappy looking.

P16-17) Samething, grass, tarp, truck.

P18-19) Not sure were the green came from. It kinda came from now where, maybe a different color choice there? I see its on the contents, but those pages do not tie together in any way. On 19, one sentence to end that page, it should be bumped to the next page. The same on 17.

P20-21) Youre gray spun tire looking stuff has some green right on the ends, no other stuff has that?

P24-25) Widows in the two first paras. Shot is ok, but the brown fence in the background isnt working.

P26-27) Again widows.

Back cover) Is there a extra space between Don't and miss?

Over all I think it works just some minor tweaks to whip it into shape.

Good luck.

[gbrown]

I do over all like the piece, however there are quite a few problems with it.

Cover) On the cover, the back wheel of the 32 roadster, is that a stick or piece of grass haninging over the wheel? Take that out. Also in the rear window, is that a person in there? The roadster should also be tweaked a bit more, the detail of the roof in the back and the hood gets lost in the white.

P4-5) In the what were all about section the text goes around the image really funny. You have bad rivers in that text as well. You also have a widow in the first paragraph of that section as well as the other side with the engine.

P6-7) Is that whole first paragraph a different point size? Could just be my screen. The last sentence on the first paragraph that ends at the top of the second column, no good.

P10-11) The headless person at the front of the car, can you take him out of that, its kinda creepy.

P12-13) Is there a type size issue with that first paragraph again? Are all paragraphs like that? I dont think thats working for you.

P14-15) Now I love that car, its really amazing, but the broken down rusty truck, blue tarp and big garbage bag looking thing are not doing anything for me, photo shop that beaut into a kick ass sceen. Plus the dead grass kinda crappy looking.

P16-17) Samething, grass, tarp, truck.

P18-19) Not sure were the green came from. It kinda came from now where, maybe a different color choice there? I see its on the contents, but those pages do not tie together in any way. On 19, one sentence to end that page, it should be bumped to the next page. The same on 17.

P20-21) Youre gray spun tire looking stuff has some green right on the ends, no other stuff has that?

P24-25) Widows in the two first paras. Shot is ok, but the brown fence in the background isnt working.

P26-27) Again widows.

Back cover) Is there a extra space between Don't and miss?

Over all I think it works just some minor tweaks to whip it into shape.

Good luck.

Thanks for the critque, I really appreciate it. I'll go back in and make some of these changes that you recommended. Anyone else have anything to add? Thanks guys.

[jennull]

I'm thinking that your gutters have too much going on in them...too much of your FABULOUS pics are gonna get lost in the spine...

[urstwile]

Is it absolutely crucial that all the text be justified? There are some gigantic wordspaces in some of the articles. Have you looked at using ragged right/left justified instead?

[popejoydesign]

Hey urstwile...the ragged right/left justified function, is that somewhere in In Design? I have looked but all I have found is the basic justified.

I would appreciate the heads up, I am about to start issue 2 of the publication I am designing.

On the magazine, I really dig the layout, I think I may steal a few ideas from it for my own work! But I will put my own little flavor on it bro...nice feel. I know it's a school piece but some of the other comments made can be done to it before its a final go to the portfolio.

[pixelphantom]

cool dude!

[mattbing]

The layout is good, the logo I don't like. Reminds me of readers digest. I like what you've done with the ad, just having the pinstripe.

[Samakimoto Graphics]

I'm thinking that your gutters have too much going on in them...too much of your FABULOUS pics are gonna get lost in the spine...

Maybe, maybe not. 'Tis a relatively small publication (number of pages). You may want to find out what kind of binding you want to use for this. If it's perfect bound then you may loose pictures into the spine...:)

[jennull]

Agreed, Samakimoto! I was thinking that since it is such a small publication, it would be perfect bound but I guess only our designer would be able to answer that, huh? LOL...so, what kind of binding are we looking at here???

[daSnarf]

Overall I think its fairly nice for what it is, but agree that the pictures with the great cars up front with old beaten down rust buckets in the back tends to be a distraction. You may not have any control over it, but if you do...that is something Id work on.

[(gra-ph!c-D'sig-nah)]

I love the cars so much....all I can say is nice! but i love the cars so I cannot focus!

[gbrown]

The binding that will be used is a saddle stitch binding. Just for low cost. Thanks for all the comments I really appreciate them. As for the "fabulous" pics ionno about that all these pics were taken with my 5.0mp kodak easyshare digital camera with very few adjustments in photoshop. Well again thanks for the comments. P.S. I just looked at my grades this morning online and I got an A in this class :) (we only had one project and that was the magazine) however i didn't get an A in weightlifting :(

[emmerse]

I have to 2nd the issues with your body copy flow. Widows, sentences carrying over to the next columns, rivers, etcs. These are the FIRST things I look for once the layout has been determined and the copy is in place. I'd try the ragged left/right option with hyphenated paragraphs to get a "full" look to your columns, but not "forced full"

overall, its a really strong design. Putting together a cohesive design that works over multiple layouts/pages is no easy task. good work.