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JaCkinbOx
06-07-2007, 08:03 PM
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v43/JaCkinbOx/lpphoenix01.png
This is an old vector illustration I'm revisiting that I've been working on for a long, long time. I think I'm very close to finishing it, but I want to put its present state up for review. Any ideas to make this a more sound illustration?
D-Frag
06-07-2007, 08:14 PM
the only thing that catches my eye is that the right wing has some cool effects going on, and the left one is boring, i think apply the style on the right to the left and it would look alot better.
JaCkinbOx
06-07-2007, 08:15 PM
Yeah, that's one of the things I'm experimenting with, hence it being one-sided at the moment.
Mynock
06-07-2007, 08:29 PM
I don't like the right side "flourishes." Also the red flames are inconsistent. You need to figure out a style first and then apply it to the whole illustration. It's a great base.
MikeTheVike
06-07-2007, 08:39 PM
I think the bird looks awesome, but the red flames at the bottom look awkward
Maybe even up the size/thickness of the flames at the bottom...some are very thin and some are much thicker. I think more consistent weight to the flames even though some are long and some are short, would help. Nice start, though.
budafist
06-07-2007, 10:05 PM
I like the flourishes but the do need some work.
JaCkinbOx
06-20-2007, 02:27 AM
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t191/contemporaneous/logos/lpphoenix02.png
This is more the direction I'd rather take it, I think.
My beef with it right now:
I think the colors need a slight adjustment, more towards a richer red.
Of course, need to clean up the outlines.
Still messing with the flames...
viince
06-20-2007, 07:47 PM
I think the red border around the bird is getting a little too thick. And the flames at the bottom should be reworked completely, or add different shades of red orange to it. Also, the circle in the back could be a lot darker so the phoenix would pop more. It's coming along.
Ben Kessler
06-20-2007, 10:05 PM
The second image is an improvement. Definitely redo the flames so that they're wider and brighter.
milano.design
06-20-2007, 10:16 PM
The thickness of the lines on the bird will be lost if made much smaller (to scale) around the beak and eyes, etc... the circle behind it did add something to it. though stroke around that i think should be less. i LOVE the smaller bottom feathers consistency. the larger feathers don't seem equadistant in alot of them. making it look like a mistake rather than something you did on purpose.
I like it but...could add some more personality to it. maybe more depth to the flames, like you did with the wings?? or make the flames at the bottom wider? Over all though i like. whats it for?
CkretAjint
06-20-2007, 10:20 PM
I would like to see more colors added to the bird. His face is very detailed with shadows and highlights. But the rest of it is just orange...
What's up with the eye booger? Looks odd to me :\
budafist
06-20-2007, 10:40 PM
More colours!
Mynock
06-20-2007, 10:45 PM
WIP = Work In Progress :)
urstwile
06-21-2007, 04:47 AM
Mynock, that smiley doesn't look very sarcastic, to me. :D
Mynock
06-21-2007, 01:23 PM
It's not. :)
Try making the outside brown darker and your red might look richer. There is a very unusual tint of a blue green (leaning towards the green) that goes really well with rust. That could be fun to experiment with as well behind the bird to make it pop. The other thing you might play with is widening the bottom part of the flames where the meet the outer circle to somewhat echo the wing span. Just some food for thought.
I love watching WIP's.