my first bussines card!

[xfxzone]

http://img339.imageshack.us/img339/1949/fiftypercentfinishedjh3.th.jpg

what do u think?:o

what can i fix from it?

i accept all the incoming critics!:p

[urstwile]

The font is illegible. If you want people to contact you, I'd rethink the font. I could barely make out your e-mail addy, and probably wouldn't have if it hadn't been for your GDF handle.

[GraphixNPrint]

It beautiferrifick! I really like the way you centered the red X

;)

couldn't resist... no image

[Kool]

I tried to get the image to work but it won't for some reason. :confused:

[GraphixNPrint]

maybe that image shack server is just down for a few...

[urstwile]

xfxzone, repost the image as RGB, I was only able to see it because Safari can preview CMYK images. Most browsers cannot.

[mkb.aus]

Not so sure about your font choice for the contact details... is it IFI2one or IFIzone? it could be read either way. The font is also very small considering this is a BC, did you print this out and have a look at the legibility of the txt? Often when designing on screen it can be easy to lose a sense of the scale, zoom to 1:1 or print it out occasionally. It also seems imo that your name should be the key detail on the card not ur email address 1st. Also the 001 on the bottom right is also quite close to the trim and I'm not sure what it represents - seems a little of a last thought idea to me.

[xfxzone]

fixed: http://img180.imageshack.us/img180/716/finalcopyob7.th.jpg (http://img180.imageshack.us/my.php?image=finalcopyob7.jpg)

[CkretAjint]

No phone number or job title stating what you do/offer? :confused:

[marcottt3]

Seems a card, you want to represent modern. As I read the text not well understood, I like the colors, I think as
You only need to change the text,your phone?

[GraphixNPrint]

a couple of things that bother me...

You should have optional contact information, a phone number... not everyone likes to go on the web for business stuff and email can be daugnting for some folks.

The blue graphic above the email; the lines extending out appear fairly thin and may look good on the monitor, but when offset printed may not be noticeable (or barely so). My shops plate at 200lpi and those would still be too thin IMO.

[xfxzone]

the job title i will put it, the telephone number i will not put it on the internet, just in case.

there are some other sketches": http://img165.imageshack.us/img165/1577/gabrielcopyiz9.th.jpg (http://img165.imageshack.us/my.php?image=gabrielcopyiz9.jpg) http://img186.imageshack.us/img186/7629/intento99copyzs6.th.jpg (http://img186.imageshack.us/my.php?image=intento99copyzs6.jpg)

thanks for the critics!

[CkretAjint]

...the telephone number i will not put it on the internet...

Just blur it out, or change a few digits on it so it's not your real number. I always just show my number as 352.555.1234. Generic enough, yet not a real number. Just make sure you change it before you print it... ;)

[YNOT]

there are some other sketches"

Sketches...my friend...are made with a pencil and paper.;)

I love the blues and black...to me those colors work perfect together. While overall that first card is cool looking, it's way too busy if you ask me. If you wanted to do the arrows, maybe think about adding them on the back of the card more as a 'filler'...a cool pattern that is just that...a background 'pattern'. Keep all of your info uncluttered and easy to read.

If you're trying to sell yourself as a 'designer' what do the arrows say about your design skills? To me they're nothing more than arrows...not anything too 'creative'. If your business name had something to do with arrows they might be cool, but more so if you made the arrows into a logomark somehow. Otherwise they're just arrows.

My suggestion, if you really like the arrows, is to run a few of those colored arrows up the right or left hand side of the card vertically and then put your contact info off to the side of that. It would be a cleaner look and would allow your type to be more readable.

Just my .02¢...take it for what it's worth.:)