Illustrated. Did you know? Book. (1st spread)

[sierng]

So... this is the first spread I did for a illustrated did you know book for pre highschool/ Early highschool kids. I'm looking for critique on the layout, type, and colours. Is there anything I should add? I want to keep it simple but the page looks a little naked to me.

Another note: some texts are longer than this and run down to about the legs.

This is for Uni btw. Fire away.


Click here for image :)
(http://i149.photobucket.com/albums/s72/sierng/sierng_newborn.jpg)

[Danger_Mouse]

That's one weird disturbed looking baby...almost demonic. Doesn't suit the copy at all. Looks like its riding in a giant flea?

[sierng]

ahaha.. yeh I was actually trying to make it look evil. Copy means the written text yeh? I could probably change the text to make it fit better.

Layout suggestions?

[Danger_Mouse]

So how would you change the copy? I mean, it's the subject matter that's the issue with the illustration (which is a nice job btw)....It just doesn't sit well with the subject matter. You are talking exciting new born senses, etc etc and then you have this demon baby living in a flea. No relation.


If this is a baby sensory article, then shouldn't the illy reflect that? Using the SENSES or some more pleasant image of a baby?

Header font choice and treatment need more work. Try enlarging and maybe some sans serif fonts. The copy and header look lost as is. ** Edit, actually the font isn't too bad, just the treatment of it. What size is the body copy? Could it be bigger?

Would seem to me the SENSES are the prime focus, why not treat the word in your text header with emphasis, or playing off the 5 sense.

Lose the drop shadow.

[MikeHun]

I agree with D Mouse as an editorial Illustration you are way off the mark.
- baby is too evil looking
- no clear metaphor of image to text
- re-work needed on concept
(at first viewing I thought baby was symbiant of half shell spider alien)

[JaCkinbOx]

The solution is easy. Market the book to adult audiences instead of children. Evil babies are amusing to adults. Look at Stewie Griffin, for example.

[Mynock]

The solution is easy. Market the book to adult audiences instead of children. Evil babies are amusing to adults. Look at Stewie Griffin, for example.I take offense to that. I'm not evil just misunderstood.

[budafist]

I like the illustration but it doesn't go with this article at all.

[kursor]

The thing that's confusing me a little is the articles talking about the senses a new born baby has yet the illustration is showing the baby still in the womb. Or inside a giant flea :)

[sierng]

Thanks for the contribution everyone.

I think the main problem here is that I'm not showing any of the senses/ the baby reacting to something. Originally I thought.. insects... insects are sensitive creatures.

I'll work on it more and try to post something up by next week.

[Optimusdinkus]

http://www.conceptart.org/forums/showthread.php?t=71836
use for inspiration =)