resume critique

[razuel]

Putting finishing touches on my new portfolio and just updated my resume,


http://www.greenleak.com/resume.pdf
Kept it at one page, any critiques, advice, input welcome.


Here's a preview of the portfolio to give you an idea of how I tried matching the resume to it, http://greenleak.com/gl4.jpg

[Navian]

Just so you know, most people here dread downloading pdf's (in other words, they hate downloading pdf's) to critique, just do a screen shot of the resume, host it on an image hosting site (imageshack.us ect..), then image link it here.

I'll critique your resume in a few min. (have to finish these few electrical drafting redlines).

[razuel]

Okay here's a screenshot of it--

http://www.greenleak.com/picture3.png

[martyng]

First of all I see you talking about yourself in the third person, telling the reader that you are seeking a part-time job. Then you go on to say you are currently a lead designer?

I don't get it

[razuel]

First of all I see you talking about yourself in the third person, telling the reader that you are seeking a part-time job. Then you go on to say you are currently a lead designer?

I don't get it

Fixed, thanks.