Poster Critique

[Mr_LeE]

Hey guys, I'm new to this forum and im trying my best to help out and partipate in other threads :).

Anyways, here's a poster I made for an Under 18's dance event for a local youth program.

What do you think?

*edit. ive only completed teaser poster so far!

I will upload the other following piece soon :)

Cheers!

Mr_LeE

http://img530.imageshack.us/img530/5461/posterteaser2ue7.th.jpg (http://img530.imageshack.us/my.php?image=posterteaser2ue7.jpg)

[Microswede]

Welcome to the GDF!

Your poster looks good, though I don't see much that makes me think of a cool dance event. You might want to put in something that has to do with the event to get people interested.

Also, the font used for the myspace addy at the bottom does not fit well with the rest of the poster. It looks like an afterthought.

The colors could be a little more 'intense'. Right now the muted red and yellow/orange don't quite live up to the title of the poster.

Overall, looks good, but could be more appealing, I think.

[Mr_LeE]

Hey Microswede,

Thanks for looking at my work. I need some feedback atleast, and it seems no one is really interested :(.

Anyways your exactly right there, the address was added last min.. as the client requested it.. Perhaps I didnt take enough care into choosing the right font i'd say.

Your suggestions fit well.. I might take some of it and add it into final product.

here is the actual event poster [IN PROGRESS] at the moment.

http://img507.imageshack.us/img507/8876/posterpreview3vk8.th.jpg (http://img507.imageshack.us/my.php?image=posterpreview3vk8.jpg)

What do you think about my direction here. (this was before i read your post.)


Cheers

[Danger_Mouse]

Second post is much more interesting to read. Nice job.

What is that background...blue jeans?

One thing...for using the word INTENSITY.....not very intense poster.
Still I like the treatment of your text in this one.

[Mr_LeE]

Second post is much more interesting to read. Nice job.

What is that background...blue jeans?

One thing...for using the word INTENSITY.....not very intense poster.
Still I like the treatment of your text in this one.

The Background is a concrete texture, then i layed a nuclear vector over the top and then pretty much grudged it up so it seems like spraypaint job.

Yeah I know the theme doesnt fit well, for an under18s dance event but I'm getting ideas now to maybe add some neon beaming lines and maybe some speakers or something to excite the under 18 year old kids up abit more i think...

thanks for the type treatment.. I'm actually pretty poor at type work. so i've been practising alot.

Mr_LeE

[Mr_LeE]

this was actually the poster the client said "I WANT IT TO BE LIKE THAT"

http://img516.imageshack.us/img516/1963/nickskitz1ru1.th.jpg (http://img516.imageshack.us/my.php?image=nickskitz1ru1.jpg)

Copying another poster isnt my style at all.. But I tried to take aspects from it to please the client at least.. (Dark contrast with exciting type treatment)..

I have no images to work with at the moment tho, because he has no dj/exciting things to promote the event yet. Still alongway away.

Your thoughts please.

[Danger_Mouse]

^looks almost comic bookish.

[Mr_LeE]

^looks almost comic bookish.

Your right.. Didnt notice that... I just saw that It was seperated into sections and used alot of gradients haha

The other poster has little content to play with, While I have alot.

More to come actually. I havnt added it all yet.

[Typically]

well for the name of the event being intensity it's not intense... rather boring actually. you need more color to liven this up. maybe try some stock photography. hot chicks always seem to end up on dance club posters :D

[Mr_LeE]

Allllrighty.. Ill post some new stuff tomz!

[Kool]

Hey Microswede,

Thanks for looking at my work. I need some feedback atleast, and it seems no one is really interested :(.



Heh heh, don't forget the time zones Mate. Most of our members are in the US and the original post was after midnight for most of them. :)

I like the type treatment but agree with the others that the overall background is a little too dark and muted. A hot babe or two is always good on these type things IMHO :D

[Mr_LeE]

hehe its midnight now! 1249am.. i better go sleep. i have uni in 7 hours :(

[Mr_LeE]

ok here's the update... what u guys think?

http://img241.imageshack.us/img241/3044/posterpreview5po8.th.jpg (http://img241.imageshack.us/my.php?image=posterpreview5po8.jpg)

i have a girl vector but i dont think i should show that version yet because its not fitting anywhere yet :S..

critz please

[teqbra]

I think it's coming on a lot more. if you look at the 1st poster compared to this, there's a massive improvement.
I'd say keep going, try playing about with the type and see if you can somehow fit the girl vector in with that.
one tip though, just know when to stop, don't make it so busy that you don't want to read it because there's too much info there.

[Mr_LeE]

Cheers brother, Yeah im working on fitting that girl vector LOL.

Yea, i know what you mean about too busy. I had that lecture from my teachers a few years ago, and I've never forgot...

Thats why i always take snap shots as i go along in photoshop so i can backtrack.

cheers

[Lithonate]

Wow. $5 in advance $25 at the door. Thats one hell of a jump.:eek:

[Mr_LeE]

Lol.. That's the client's content.. I just design :P

I thought it was a pretty big jump too. Apprently last time they had the event, they sold out before the 1st week ended. (crazy under 18's!)

http://img511.imageshack.us/img511/9290/posterpreview6qf1.jpg

Here is my final version! Any Feedback?

Do you think I should add my Logo in as well?

Lee

[Randomhero]

I like it a lot. The only thing I'm not sure about is the //////// underlining text. It seems to me it turns the section into a solid mass. I'd kinda like to see it without that but if thats not possible it looks great.

[Typically]

don't put your logo on it.

[martyng]

don't put your logo on it.

I'll second that.

[Mr_LeE]

thanks guys! very happy for your feedback!

Client is very happy and it should go out in about 2 months LOL.

Cheers
Lee

[scAtterBrain]

I agree, Randomhero, the slashes make it a bit harder to read. Perhaps if they weren't the same size as the font. Also, you might play with the Y in intensity. I keep seening "intensit4". Maybe add a horizontal to the descender. Planet Kosmos font has a lot of issues like that. And that red color in intensity needs to be way more "intense". Brighter. Perhaps white, or the yellow you use in "The novotel return party". Right now the title is getting pushed back by the description. Sit back from it and blur your eyes. Everything else looks great!

[Wolfwood]

The female dancer made for a big improvement. Posters need to be quick reads and get the idea across quickly, and that graphic really helps convey the idea of a party. Nice job!

[Mr_LeE]

The female dancer made for a big improvement. Posters need to be quick reads and get the idea across quickly, and that graphic really helps convey the idea of a party. Nice job!

thanks mate! Really appreicate the advice and feedback! :D

yeah also lucky its a free vector :P

[Tea]

Looks great. I noticed what might be a typo. M.C's. Should there be a second period after the C? You'll need someone else to chime in on that one but it is my understanding that it stands for Master of Ceremonies. There is some additional upper and lower case inconsistencies in the text with Police, security, cloak room...etc., but I don't know if that was intentional or not.

M.C.'s

[Mr_LeE]

Ok client wanted updated changes.

I will post it up soon as soon as he reviews it.

Lee