a quick critique plz?!?!?!

[ashleyJACKskyla]

this is a flyer for a friend. dont really the point of "cruise night"..but that's what they do.

but this is what i got. he didnt really tell me what he wanted, but told me to make it look good.

he wants to hand them out at car shows in cali

thanks

http://i86.photobucket.com/albums/k113/snow_white70466/flyer2-1.jpg

ALL AND ANY CRITIQUE IS WELCOME!

[RiZE iNK]

I think your started heading in a good direction.. but the red truck just looks awkward, the "cruise night seems a little compressed especially compared the text below it.

[Randomhero]

The blue truck looks really good, but the red one definitely has the look of some kinda floating space truck. I don't know why you capitalized EACH like that. Seems a little forceful and unnecessary to me. You might want to look into flattening the left side of the text in the corner also, I reads weird to me. Esp. with the capitalized Norcal on the end.

[quanvudesigns]

Go back and try to correct the selection on the red truck. Also, try to add shadow so it won't looks like it floating in the air.

[ashleyJACKskyla]

thanks for the critique guys, i'll try some things out and get back with ya! hope you all check back!!

Thanks again!

any more suggestions?

[filthydesign]

i think the type size on the body text looks a little large it needs to be a greater contrast from the address.

the title looks a little skewed or squashed

the red truck color looks funny too much magenta i think or contrastd too much, i agree about the selection fix

maybe an accent color in the text would be nice too

[datswhutsup]

i agree with all the critiques so far. my two cents, is your talking about an event that takes place at night and has night in the headline, i would get rid of the white background and add some night life on there.

=)

good luck!

[dwagener]

Add more trucks! Car shows/events usually involve a lot of cars, and it's usually a good thing if there's more cars at a show... So in my opinion I think it would be more attracting to the person that is handed this if there were more to look at on the flyer itself and also leaves them to believe more people are going to be there which equals more fun! schyahhh :D I'd also like to see it with a dark background

[akataka]

Having "EACH" be capitalized seems unecessary and I think what you say on the left is a little redundant and it's a lot of lines to look glance through for a flyer. "CRUISE NIGHT" looks squeezed and the kerning is real tight probably done to fit it right but looks a little too squeezed.

[ashleyJACKskyla]

thanks for all the comments you guys....i changed a few things that you all suggested, and it looks nice. i couldnt add more trucks, if i had them i would....but, my friends loved it! when i get a chance i will post the final!

thanks again!
ashley

[Randomhero]

:D, glad to be of help. I can't wait to see it.

[Jackimalyn]

i really dont like the star wars font... and i agree with the other posts. otherwise, i think you are getting there

[tZ]

You should never begin designing until you establish a concise objective and the dominant attributes of the intended audience. Until then your just going on what you think looks good rather than taking into account the people that really matter.

[ashleyJACKskyla]

You should never begin designing until you establish a concise objective and the dominant attributes of the intended audience. Until then your just going on what you think looks good rather than taking into account the people that really matter.

i know who the intended audience was...he just didnt know what kind of design he wanted....that's why he told me to make it look good...

i asked for an opinion of my art work, and what could i do to improve it, i didnt expect someone to attack my character like that. it was for a friend, and i did it free of charge---a favor.

but ill keep my head high because i had a nice bit of helpful comments!

thanks to all of you!

and here is the final...hope you all enjoy!

http://i86.photobucket.com/albums/k113/snow_white70466/flyerblack.jpg

the magenta truck...just shows that way on screen! IDK why!

i worked with the body text as much as i felt that i could...

i added color to the font like suggested

and i made it black like suggested!

he loved it and i hope you all do to! even if you still have some suggestions, i would love to hear then!

thanks AGAIN and AGAIN!

ashley!


EDIT: as for the red truck looking like it is floating, he insisted it stay like that!

[tZ]

What I said wasn't meant to be an attack. A critique isn't just about the end result its about the road and choices you made to get there. I just thought it was a poor choice to begin designing before you really knew anything about the event which you clearly stated in one of your earlier post.

[ashleyJACKskyla]

What I said wasn't meant to be an attack. A critique isn't just about the end result its about the road and choices you made to get there. I just thought it was a poor choice to begin designing before you really knew anything about the event which you clearly stated in one of your earlier post.

well i appoligize. i just took it wrong. i did know what the event was about. when i said in my first post that i didnt really understand "cruise night".....i meant, i dont know why they go and do that. but they just ride around so that people can get a look at their vehicles! but glad we cleared that up, ill be more specific next time! sorry for the confusion!

[M4ven]

I am going to have to agree that the initial thought process was good, but it's lacking some visual interest. Especially, when promoting an event such as this. If it were me, I would add a splash of red to Cruise Knight as a mirror to the color of the truck.

Edited: The second flyer is actually much better | nice work.

[ensculpt]

I may be wrong but where I come from cruise night consists of a bunch of people with really fly lowrider trucks, these are a bit too suburban looking. I can't be sure without more client info, but if you do a google image search of "low rider trucks" you'll see what i suspect will be more appropriate images of trucks.

[ashleyJACKskyla]

I may be wrong but where I come from cruise night consists of a bunch of people with really fly lowrider trucks, these are a bit too suburban looking. I can't be sure without more client info, but if you do a google image search of "low rider trucks" you'll see what i suspect will be more appropriate images of trucks.

well they are just trying to make the truck scene in general larger...all types...they are mostly low riders, but, the blue one is bagged, the red one just has the lfit kit. an di didnt argue with the cliet, he wanted those two truck on it. but he liked it. so im happy!

EDIT: and im totally sure of what low riders are, in louisiana, they are everywhere! lol and my fiance is one of them! but hes not a mini trucker, hes got a 4 door 04' dodge dropped