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jarmart
04-25-2009, 01:58 AM
negative feedback only =)
http://i39.tinypic.com/14y23gy.jpg
boylearnsdesign
04-25-2009, 02:13 AM
I think you should simplify your caps more. But that's just my personal style.
Schmitty
04-25-2009, 02:30 AM
Actually in the process of designing my own as well. I think you need some hierarchy in your type. The 'texture' the blocks of copy have are competing with the imagery.
All caps is making this irritating to read.
jjilliam
04-25-2009, 04:21 AM
watch your kerning and leading, especially the edges. if you want it to look like a block, the last lines in each block of text need to be addressed. right now the line length appears to be shorter than the rest of the text.
Grfk Dzgn
04-25-2009, 05:02 AM
That effort leaves me thinking the graphic design program over at San Jose State U is one of the lamest in the country.
Why did you get lazy on the mortarboards? The boring background established a light source bottom right. The light/shadow of the mortarboards are completely different. You got lazy, and simply used the same image over and over again rotated and scaled. And in doing so, cheapened the whole piece. Is that what you've been taught? All caps in those closely related sans killed any chance of type dynamics.
Is this graphic really about a celebration? This whole thing is just cheap, flat and lifeless.
Negative enough for you??
CMYK girl
04-26-2009, 02:25 AM
I concur with the all caps being hard to read and the light source being off on the mortarboards according to the background light source.
shmoo
04-27-2009, 07:51 AM
B.A in Graphic Design and THATS what you come up with for yourself? Ouch.
Riefnu
04-27-2009, 06:27 PM
Photoshop filter on the hats?
light blue to white gradient with white text?
All caps?
Stock photo for a minor in photography? Scratch that. Google images hat, first image, being thrown? http://www.fallingpixel.com/products/5794/mains/gradcap1.jpg
Stretched the words to fit the shape?
2 pm to Whenever?
salsa
04-27-2009, 07:35 PM
The tassels look like a standard Illustrator brush, and they're cut off in the middle. Also, have you tried printing this to see how the white text and gradients look on paper?