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What do you think... Does the type reflect a journey of connection.
The idea is that the journey is the literal meaning of him going to the station with the suitcase in his hand to find love or know that his women still loves him. And the connection is through him trying to find out if he has love on the other end.
The text comes from Robert Johnsons song Love in vain.
CkretAjint
12-03-2009, 12:37 PM
Pain-in-the-arse to focus on a read... The type curving every which way doesn't really help either.
Pain-in-the-arse to focus on a read... The type curving every which way doesn't really help either.
okay thanks.
BJMRamage
12-03-2009, 01:02 PM
I applaud you on the approach. but it is hard to read with the lines waving/weaving "through" the text. why the jumping between condensed and bold?
martyng
12-03-2009, 02:59 PM
"All my loves in vain"
Is that right? love is, love's, loves' ?
Audentia
12-03-2009, 03:11 PM
its makes me a bit dizzy to look at it.
I would see about making it less of an optical illusion.
Bladez
12-03-2009, 03:28 PM
the leading on the middle line makes me feel uncomfortable. And like BJ said, going from the condensed to the bold makes it hard on the eyes to follow.
Grfk Dzgn
12-03-2009, 04:02 PM
Try using just using one script font with swashes. You might try taking the whole idea into a more modern feel by updating the swashes and the font too. Using a bold sans serif with swashes looks like so many of those old skool labels.
Mick Taylor's interpretation of Love in Vain is really quite good...
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nmVW94UWgBg
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seamas
12-03-2009, 04:23 PM
It's a great song.
I think if you abandon the center alignment and symmetry, you will have more freedom to imply movement. (symmetry tends to make compositions sit still)
Also, I think the all-caps isn't helping. Think of all those ascenders and descenders you are missing out on exploiting for implying movement!
There is an urgency and emotion inherent in Johnson's song that I'd have liked to have seen in this.
If this is a typographical assignment, I have to point out that you are making the swashes do all the work in this --as opposed to the type.
Watch your kerning and your leading. It would help it flow better.
It looks like there is an extra space after AND,. I'm pretty sure it should be LOVE'S too.