Advertisment layout

[minicom]

hi,
here is my personal practise advertisement layout, the information is get from nikken.com. So, pls give me the comment!!!!!!!!!!!!!
thank you

[Vikia]

Welcome to the forum.

I am assuming you are in school? This ad is not working for me at all. First the product {at first glance) looks like a pack of cigarettes with a tagline "A breath of fresh air". That was disturbing until I figured out what the product actually was.

I have no idea what the image in the pink to the top is. The copy blocks look like afterthoughts to fill space. Centering each of them parallel to each other looks strange to me. Also too many fonts and none of the fonts are working together very well.

[minicom]

Ok, i already modify that layout below:

[tZ]

still appears like a pack of cigs

Maybe another view would work better

[minicom]

But the product is original like that, do you think how can modify to be correct?

[danedawg99]

allright. The second one is much better. You cleaned it up and that's good. I'm still not clear on what that image in the middle is. is a window? with a pillow? If it's unclear in an attempt to abstract it, take it further. As my design teacher once said, "If you can't tell if it's just badly cropped or intentionally that way, it's badly cropped." the product image, I assume you either got from a client or their website, yes? Not much we can do about that. Why do you have a flower-burst in the bottom? Unneccessary, I'd lose it.
The logo; did you design it or is it theirs?
The tagline; first, the whooshy thing is cliche'd. It's ok to do cliché, but try to do your own take on it. lose the white or line it up to match the words better.

that's everything i can think of. I hope this helps you some. :D

[keith1]

I would make the picture of the product the main focus. Make it large, make it dominate the page. Then put the list of qualities next to it vertically. Make the map & telephone number smaller & tighter. There are still too many colors & fonts going on.

[Mynock]

limit the numbers of different fonts to like two or three

[minicom]

Thank you everyone to give me a good comment.
Ok, so i modify the layout again below, 3rd version.

[Skyler]

Oh, wow, that third one is much better. The text flows. I like the cool blue.

[Mynock]

much much better. try something different for the text on the left side of the item. it works, but it could be better

[keith1]

Try removing the outer glow or stroke around the type on the right side of the item and change it from black to the blue color of Nikken at the top. I would also tighten up the word "Nikken".

[minicom]

I am very happy for everyone to help me, thank you!!
Here i layout the 2 sample layout, the 1ADV.jpg is dark cool colour,
and i think the dark color is very waste my inkjet ink, so the 2ADV.jpg , layout is clear design.