magazine ad

[wiffle ball]

This is an ad for a local bike shop that I did, i would just like some suggestions and opinions please.

[Pica]

Do you have samples of the magazine in which the ad will run? You might want to check the reproduction quality of their black-heavy ads. Admittedly my experience is primarily with newspaper ads, but I've seen designs with lots of black end up looking almost like a gradient rather than solid color depending on the production quality. Check to make sure they don't have a problem with colors bleeding because the fine stroke on your smaller text might be hard to read if it's not super sharp (it already seems a little too fine to me). Is there supposed to be some sort of punctuation in the phone number? (I don't see any.) Is the background on the bottom supposed to be black or dark gray? On my screen it looks a shade or two lighter than the black on the top of the ad.

[wiffle ball]

Is this image showing at all?

[13yrGuru]

Ya, sry I can't see this image!

[vtwin_gary]

broken link

[wiffle ball]

now?

[vtwin_gary]

nope

[camp9483]

Hi,

I like it overall. Looking at it from the consumer's side, it was just a touch difficult for me to initially locate the contact info - address and phone.

to be more clear, I didnt see them right away.

Nice image though.

I don't quite understand the "p" behind perserverance. I almost think that if it weren't there, it would be less distracting.

But like I said - overall, it's looking good.

Best of luck,
Dale

[wiffle ball]

yeah, so i fixed the broken link, comments are def. welcome.

[Rus]

I don't think the word "perserverance" works where it's at. It's kinda hard to look at becuase you have a lot of movement in that space (bike, lines, word). Have you tried moving in more of a header position, in the black space at the top of the ad? Make it span the entire width of the ad.

[wiffle ball]

I don't think the word "perserverance" works where it's at. It's kinda hard to look at becuase you have a lot of movement in that space (bike, lines, word). Have you tried moving in more of a header position, in the black space at the top of the ad? Make it span the entire width of the ad.

i actually like that idea a lot.

[wiffle ball]

Yeah, so i fixed it so you don't have to click a link to view it.

[tony620d]

looks like a motivational poster from the 70's.

[Mynock]

I agree with tony620d

[keith1]

repairs, service, lessons, quality is all out of line.

[wiffle ball]

looks like a motivational poster from the 70's.
Is that a good thing?

[keith1]

If it's supposed to be retrocentric (<<I think I just made that up word up), yes it's a good thing.

[wiffle ball]

Well, after looking over it a while, I think it would be better if it was a poster for inside of the shop, maybe a series, rather than an ad.