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    Hi guys,

    I posted something under General discussions yesterday and was advised about the Student forum - I'm self teaching and I would like to know what you guys think about the below works. I actually noticed a couple mistakes myself, but I'll leave the work as is for now.

    1. Cover page of my portfolio - the crane symbolizes that this is a work in progress, and as I get more skilled, the portfolio will be updated. The idea I have is to put together an initial portfolio that would get me an internship or the chance to gain working experience, when I and my work are ready for it. The sketch and the crane vector are downloaded from the internet, so I've put them together with the text and chose a font I thought it looked professional, slim and elegant and complemented the crane for letter T.

    2. Magazine cover - the actual layout was half inspired by an existing magazine cover. The image of the cello player was outsourced, everything else I had to put together myself, from choosing fonts, font style for the title, content, color, title running behind the player's head (although the head crop is a bit shaky) and the tip of the cello resting on the banner etc.

    3. Business cards - I took an existing business card layout and tried to perk it up a bit. I know the owner of the company and he was looking for someone to change their design slightly, but still keeping the same colors, logo, fonts even. I'm noticing that by compressing the png's further, some of the quality of text and color was lost, not sure if such issues can be overcome?

    So please if you have time, do leave me a message, even if it's to comment on only one of the images attached, I'd appreciate input onto layout, spacial awareness, eye pleasing or not, technical errors or tweaks, compatibility of elements on page.

    Many thanks,

    Jools
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    POR FOLIO
    The crane does not read as a T. It is too much of an Illustrative element and isn't made to be part of the word.
    What is the wrecking ball hanging off the back end of the crane? The working end of a tower crane is the long end.
    The font choice for a ‘’construction site’’ is a little on the wimpy side.
    The whole thing is static. It doesn't look like a lot of activity going on. Something under construction implies activity.

    The Magazine cover has a few interesting things going on. Little things like the cello stand breaking through the plane.
    Not digging the red banner across the center.
    Do you want the magazine to be just for beginners? Or for ''‘’students?''
    Who’s the guy in the photo? If he is the one named, Perhaps that leader needs to be different. Or not. Magazines vary.
    Again, a very static, vertical design without a lot of hierarchy. The eye is drawn to the guy’'s face (human faces do that) which brings the title into play. The rest of it is sort of similar and drowns itself out. The banner competes with all the leaders.

    The business card is a business card. They are peripheral to any branding package. How does this fit into the rest of the brand look? Do people still use QR codes? I haven’'t updated the one in my phone in ages.

    With a portfolio, no one particularly needs to know what ‘’software skills’’ were used to create it. As we told you in the other thread, software is just a tool.
    Last edited by PrintDriver; 07-11-2017, 05:51 AM.

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    • #3
      I agree with PrintDriver on the issues with the crane. Particularly that it doesn't read well. It's a noble concept, just in this case is took me a minute to identify it as a "T".

      The magazine cover seemed solid. Simple. Which is good.

      I have to say on those business cards, the size of your type (particularly and the business card with the red section on the right) is super tiny. No one is going to me able to read that. Plus as a knockout, when printed digitally, it's going to bleed together. The finer details of the typeface may be lost entirely.

      Overall as the work of a student I think it's quite good. With experience, I imagine you're on the road to becoming a fine designer.

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      • #4
        Thank you Driver and Biggs, got plenty to think about and act on now.

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        • #5
          I must tell you that you are one with creative mind, the way you have put on your ideas shows the creativity must be highlt appreciated friend. Keep doing the hard work via applying your creative mind.
          I liked it.

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          • #6
            Hi David and welcome to GDF.

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            • #7
              Originally posted by PrintDriver View Post
              Again, a very static, vertical design without a lot of hierarchy.
              Hi Driver (and anyone else who has some ideas on this), I've been thinking about this line of yours, could you perhaps give a few examples of how I could have made the magazine cover less static?

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              • #8
                Have a look at other music, symphony or similar related magazine covers. See how they put some ''life'' into their subjects, whether it is angle, lighting, focus, etc. and how they use the leaders to draw your attention.
                If you have a store with a magazine rack, print yours out, stick it to a piece of cardboard and place it in the rack and stand back. How does it compete? How does it display in the holder? Is important stuff covered?

                Gotta note, I dunno how the store security these days would feel about this, and they might object to photos being taken. The grocery store near our college was used to it and never gave us grief if only a few of us were there at any one time. They didn't like it if the whole study group came (there were 6 of us plus a couple of occasionals.) And they hated cameras (back then it was still film and early phd under 5mp point&shoots) as shelving real estate strategy was considered proprietary. I saw a top line soda delivery driver nabbed and escorted out by security for photographing the soft drink shelving where his company product was located. They didn't get to stock that day and never saw that driver there again.
                Last edited by PrintDriver; 07-13-2017, 05:59 AM.

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                • #9
                  Originally posted by PrintDriver View Post
                  Have a look at other music, symphony or similar related magazine covers. See how they put some ''life'' into their subjects, whether it is angle, lighting, focus, etc. and how they use the leaders to draw your attention.
                  If you have a store with a magazine rack, print yours out, stick it to a piece of cardboard and place it in the rack and stand back. How does it compete? How does it display in the holder? Is important stuff covered?

                  Gotta note, I dunno how the store security these days would feel about this, and they might object to photos being taken. The grocery store near our college was used to it and never gave us grief if only a few of us were there at any one time. They didn't like it if the whole study group came (there were 6 of us plus a couple of occasionals.) And they hated cameras (back then it was still film and early phd under 5mp point&shoots) as shelving real estate strategy was considered proprietary. I saw a top line soda delivery driver nabbed and escorted out by security for photographing the soft drink shelving where his company product was located. They didn't get to stock that day and never saw that driver there again.
                  It wouldn't be a problem here, store staff couldn't care less if they tried (not sure that's a good thing either)

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                  • #10
                    Originally posted by PrintDriver View Post
                    Have a look at other music, symphony or similar related magazine covers. See how they put some ''life'' into their subjects, whether it is angle, lighting, focus, etc. and how they use the leaders to draw your attention.
                    If you have a store with a magazine rack, print yours out, stick it to a piece of cardboard and place it in the rack and stand back. How does it compete? How does it display in the holder? Is important stuff covered?

                    Gotta note, I dunno how the store security these days would feel about this, and they might object to photos being taken. The grocery store near our college was used to it and never gave us grief if only a few of us were there at any one time. They didn't like it if the whole study group came (there were 6 of us plus a couple of occasionals.) And they hated cameras (back then it was still film and early phd under 5mp point&shoots) as shelving real estate strategy was considered proprietary. I saw a top line soda delivery driver nabbed and escorted out by security for photographing the soft drink shelving where his company product was located. They didn't get to stock that day and never saw that driver there again.
                    Had another look online for music magazine covers and here are 4 examples. I couldn't really find anything I liked. The variety of type used on just one cover I don't find pleasing, nor the proportions or layout.

                    The Piano for Beginners is easy to read though, clean and the Guitarist cover is an elegant photo, but looks old fashioned, might be an older issue or to do with the fact that they were paying tribute to old Chuck.

                    I think my magazine cover has the potential to look much better than all of these, if I remove the red banner alone!
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