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    I am a self-taught illustrating noob. Here is a vector illustration I have created for a friend who is a home baker and owns a tiny business.

    I feel the artwork definitely needs some improvement. All suggestions/critique/feedback are welcome.
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  • #2
    Hi Pinx and welcome to GDF.

    What is the purpose of this art piece? Is it a logo, art for a website, etc.?

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    • #3
      Hi KitchWitch. Thanks for the warm welcome.

      About the artwork: I created it to be printed on a mug and gift it to my friend. She specialises in healthy bakes and operates her bakery from home. Plus she personally delivers the baked products to her customers. This artwork shows her having a bakery of her own in the future.

      Software Used: Adobe Illustrator, textures created in Photoshop. Colour palette from the internet.

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      • #4
        Originally posted by Pinx View Post
        [Here is a vector illustration I have created for a friend who is a home baker and owns a tiny business.
        Commenting on the aesthetics of your illustration is one thing, but you mention it being for business purposes. That being the case, the main criterion for critiquing it would be how well it might accomplish the business purpose for which it was created. It's a nice, fun illustration, but you've given us no information as to what it's going to be used for or what purpose it's intended to accomplish for your home baker friend's business.

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        • Pinx
          Pinx commented
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          I created the artwork to be printed on a mug and gift it to my friend. Apologies for not specifying the actual purpose. I actually wanted to get feedback on the aesthetics of the artwork - color scheme, composition, quality, creativity and so on.

      • #5
        OK

        The illustration has an appealing naive, primitive quality that might or might not fit the client's branding. Since it's a friend's home bakery, I'm assuming maintaining brand consistency isn't an issue.

        I'm not sure a Pepto-Bismol pink is an especially mouth-watering color for baked goods. If it were me, I'd stick to the earth tones that evoke the delicious aromas of a bakery. Pinks might be more appropriate for a candy store.

        You've spaced everything out along the inner edges of the circle -- sort of like a clock. This could be interesting, but it looks just a little too methodical. For example, the heads of wheat at the top look a bit like filler material that was used because you couldn't think of what else to put in the spot. Stacks of flour, measuring cups, timers, spoons, mixing bowls, etc., might also be used as well to take up space.

        I have mixed feelings about the lollipop and cupcake bushes. Again, they suggest more of a sweet shop or candy confectionary than a bakery, but I guess that really depends on the nature of the bakery and what's being baked.

        What about typography? I'm assuming the name of the business should be on the mug too. If so, that's going to be part of the design too. Have you given the type any thoughts?

        Again though, it has a nice primitive quality that suggests homemade quality and loving care, which is good. I just don't think it's quite there yet, but in my opinion, you're on the right track.
        Last edited by B; 12-04-2017, 07:01 PM. Reason: Typo fixes

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        • Pinx
          Pinx commented
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          Thanks B for the thorough feedback.
          Yes, I was thinking about adding some typography, like a short quote (e.g. Live Love Bake). Maybe on the mug separately or incorporated with the illustration.

      • #6
        Listen to what "B" has to say - I've been following this forum for some time and B always has good, experienced, professional advice. I'll add my two cents on top of that.

        B mentioned typography, and if we rotate that circle a bit, or the graphics within, you'll have a decent horizontal space for some type. Business name, the baker's name - something. Promotional items (like mugs) are great, but you're not promoting anything here. Have a name of some-kind so whenever the user of the mugs takes a drink they're reminded of the baker.

        Also, good job creating a design that's actually very "in" right now with modern design trends and is expected to increase in popularity in 2018. This pictograph/gram style is catchy, fun to look at, and has a rather nostalgic effect.

        To improve the art, maybe we can fill it in a bit. A nice thick, chunky wheat field would look nice. Maybe have the baker walking toward the customers house. Maybe additional greenery. Design a plethora of different seasonal plants and bushes (same them and name them well) and you can change the art from one batch of mugs to the next. Artwork that evolves with the seasons. It becomes like a fun collectible element.

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        • Pinx
          Pinx commented
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          Thanks Biggs097 for the feedback and the wonderful idea about adding a seasonal element to it. I have some new ideas running through my head now.

      • #7
        The OP stated they are going to have this printed on a mug as a gift for their friend. I don't think this is a commercial piece of art, but something created as a personal gift. I'm not sure the OP is getting the feedback they're looking for.
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        • #8
          Originally posted by KitchWitch View Post
          The OP stated they are going to have this printed on a mug as a gift for their friend. I don't think this is a commercial piece of art, but something created as a personal gift. I'm not sure the OP is getting the feedback they're looking for.
          Hmmm, you could easily be right about that. My first read through made me think it was gifting the artwork to a baker friend to be printed on promotional mugs for the home baking business. Maybe it is just a single mug to give someone as a gift.

          I'm so used to dealing with all this stuff from a professional standpoint, that I forget it can be something else, like a simple Christmas gift mug.

          Oh well, if that's the case, I'll still stand by most of my last post as possible ways to improve the illustration. Really though, if I got a mug with that artwork as a gift from a friend who had made it especially for me, I'd most definitely cherish it.

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          • #9
            After going through Biggs097 and B's feedback, I am thinking about expanding this project into a collectible concept for home bakers or anyone who loves baking. Thanks guys for helping me think beyond.

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