Thanks for the feedback, guys. I'll make adjustments and re-post. I agree the copy is pretty cliche', but it's what was provided by the client. I think the "investment" refers to since it's the real thing, it could be considered a collectors item or antique as opposed to a reproduction.
Eugene, it'll be sent out in html via mailchimp. It's only 600px wide, so shouldn't be too large.
I'd like to see the text take up a little less page space. The image has a nice feel to it and it feels a little cramped at the moment - let it breathe! The font has the right feel but I wonder how a sans would look for the body text - maybe a little cleaner and letting the Heading and website stand out a little more.
First thing I noticed is that you will have to email this out as 1 large image. Most common email providers do not support background images underneath type. Thus, ALL your type needs to be part of the image. Which means this needs to be 1 image and the file size will be large(r) than necessary, which will take a while for people to download to view (especially on slow connections). NOT GOOD!
Having said that, there is no need for a "click here" link since you might as well make the entire image clickable.
You have double spaces at the start of your sentences. This is not required and will look nicer with single spaces.
No legal/copyright information?
No "Unsubscribe" link??
No "Click here, if you are having difficulties viewing this email" link???