Announcement

Collapse
No announcement yet.

email flyer

Collapse
X
  • Filter
  • Time
  • Show
Clear All
new posts

  • email flyer

    I'd love to hear your thoughts / suggestions.


  • #2
    Leading is far too tight, the lowercase g has it's descender on top of the uppercase B.

    The copy is a little awful, I wouldn't use the words "painstakingly restored", sounds like it was a tedious job where it should invoke the feeling of a joyful occasion.

    "genuine icon" isn't a great term either.

    You have double spaces after full stops.

    Other than that the flyer is ok, not a bad job.

    How are you sending this via email? As flash, html, image, pdf etc?

    The image did take a few seconds to load and i'm on a fairly fast internet connection. What file size is it when being sent via email?

    "May your hats fly as high as your dreams"Michael Scott

    Comment


    • #3
      I agree with Eugene that the leading is way too tight. First thing I noticed.

      'A British' feels very awkwardly placed.

      The 'Why purchase a replica' line feels rather lost in the copy. I'd consider somehow making that sentence stand out more, as it seems to be a important question to ask a prospective buyer.
      ___________
      Burn the land and boil the sea, you can't take the sky from me.

      blog/portfolio

      Comment


      • #4
        You're saying "invest in the genuine icon".

        How is it an investment?

        "May your hats fly as high as your dreams"Michael Scott

        Comment


        • #5
          Thanks for the feedback, guys. I'll make adjustments and re-post. I agree the copy is pretty cliche', but it's what was provided by the client. I think the "investment" refers to since it's the real thing, it could be considered a collectors item or antique as opposed to a reproduction.

          Eugene, it'll be sent out in html via mailchimp. It's only 600px wide, so shouldn't be too large.
          Last edited by R2 Mark; 03-02-2010, 10:49 AM.

          Comment


          • #6
            Ah lousy clients. We'd be much better off without them

            Sure, the advert is fine, and if there's nothing you can do about the copy then there's nothing you can do.

            I don't know about them being an investment though. But that's just me.


            I agree with what Virgo said and make some of the text into "call to action" as they say in the marketing business.

            "May your hats fly as high as your dreams"Michael Scott

            Comment


            • #7
              I agree with vigro "A British" is awkwardly placed

              But may i ask why someone would want a phone booth in their garden lol but that would be quite convenient

              Heck I'd buy one xD

              Comment


              • #8
                Agree. Copy on their Web page is better.

                Comment


                • #9
                  Originally posted by lucdesaulniers View Post
                  Agree. Copy on their Web page is better.

                  Very much agree.

                  Of course, did you notice who they are using for their hosting? I'm sorry, but I just think those Go Daddy commericials are hilarious.
                  "Go ahead, make your logos in PS. We charge extra money to redraw your logo into vector art so it can be printed on promotional product. Cha CHING! " - CCericola

                  Comment


                  • #10
                    I'd like to see the text take up a little less page space. The image has a nice feel to it and it feels a little cramped at the moment - let it breathe! The font has the right feel but I wonder how a sans would look for the body text - maybe a little cleaner and letting the Heading and website stand out a little more.

                    Comment


                    • #11
                      First thing I noticed is that you will have to email this out as 1 large image. Most common email providers do not support background images underneath type. Thus, ALL your type needs to be part of the image. Which means this needs to be 1 image and the file size will be large(r) than necessary, which will take a while for people to download to view (especially on slow connections). NOT GOOD!

                      Having said that, there is no need for a "click here" link since you might as well make the entire image clickable.

                      You have double spaces at the start of your sentences. This is not required and will look nicer with single spaces.

                      No legal/copyright information?

                      No "Unsubscribe" link??

                      No "Click here, if you are having difficulties viewing this email" link???
                      Professional Pixel Pusher Designing the world around you. | Working daily to reach 10,000 hours of practice.

                      Comment


                      • #12
                        Originally posted by darkwolf29a View Post
                        I'm sorry, but I just think those Go Daddy commericials are hilarious.
                        LOL... I agree again

                        Comment

                        Search

                        Collapse

                        Sponsor

                        Collapse

                        Incredible Stock

                        Latest Topics

                        Collapse

                        • Robbyjhb
                          Logo Design for my company
                          Robbyjhb
                          Hi Guys

                          I have attached 4 logo concepts for my personal company, the company brands leather items as well as hot foil stamps invitations diaries notebooks ect, we are based in South Africa...
                          Today, 03:30 AM
                        • B
                          Reply to ​What is your favorite forum software?
                          B
                          I'd normally let these kinds of things go as a matter of opinion, but in this case, with people recommending vBulletin, I need to say something.

                          Quite likely the worst so-called upgrade in...
                          Yesterday, 07:39 PM
                        • B
                          Reply to Heatmap help
                          B
                          If by combine, you mean overlay them on top of each other while preserving and combining the red areas of both, yes, Photoshop can easily do it -- at least in this particular instance with these two images....
                          Yesterday, 07:11 PM
                        • B
                          Comment on Design Help
                          B
                          You know, back when I was in college, I remember taking stock of all the bad design around me -- from supermarket aisles to magazine layouts, it was everywhere. I mistakenly thought this whole design...
                          Yesterday, 06:59 PM
                        • Risen28
                          Reply to Design Help
                          Risen28
                          Oh man , its like biggs said this happens with every graphic designer and web designer. I Find it quite ironic when some clients pay you for your service ,"which is to provide a effective design...
                          Yesterday, 04:41 PM
                        GDF A division of Mediabistro Holdings Adweek | Mediabistro | Clio | Film Expo Group Contact Us | Terms of Use | Privacy Policy Copyright 2016 Mediabistro Holdings
                        Working...
                        X