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    Trying to create a type piece from the quote you You never get a second chance to make a first impression.

    Here is the basic for of the type, no textures colors or anything like that yet.

    Let me know what you think. Tried to get everything to flow together pretty well.
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  • #2
    Seems all too tight. You need a bit more white space. Your kerning is off here and there, and the "IMPRESSION" font is looks strange. The strokes of the M and N are narrower than the rest. Did you squish them?

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    • #3
      I'm still mastering kerning, so I'm not surprised, and particular spots you can point out? The Impression is ITC Franklin Gothic Ultra Condensed. I noticed the stroke difference, but its all the same point size and no distortion. I was going to make the strokes larger, but I'm not sure how to get it even on the diagonals. White space between words or looser kerning?

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      • #4
        The connecting of the RST in the word FIRST looks too forced and unnatural. If you are going to do that, recreate those parts of the letters from scratch to make them flow together better. Did you stretch the left arm of the T? If so, you should unstretch it.

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        • #5
          Might be fun to make "First" into "1st" instead, to play with 2nd and 1st together. Or something. Right now there's not much that really stands out as all that interesting, kerning and curves aside. I also think the "a" all by itself is looking a bit odd. I'm also not a fan of the elongated "I" and "N" to form those walls around First. Seems a little awkward right now?

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          • #6
            Kerning problems are basically there in IMPRESSION, I would suggest maybe replacing that font with something like League Gothic (free) http://www.theleagueofmoveabletype.com/league-gothic/

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            • #7
              Here is my variation, with some of the suggestions put into action. I've also begun adding secondary elements and pulling together a woodtype style.
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              • #8
                This one looks more interesting, but you should try and resolve it using black only. It will force you to deal with compositional elements better. Overlapping woodtype doesn't work.

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                • #9
                  Here is a revision with that in mind. I left aligned the "you" to balance the now more right aligned "get a" and separated all the type so nothing was stacked. Hid the arrow so it doesn't interfere with the type.
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                  • #10
                    After I uploaded that I noticed that the swashes around "nd" looked to arbitrary, so I extended them to cover both letters.
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                    • #11
                      I have a feeling these would look a lot better if they weren't so close to the edge of the artboard.

                      I like this a lot better. Are the last 3 lines centred? You may have to optically centre IMPRESSION due to the fact that the T in FIRST has a small footprint, IMPRESSION therefore looks like it's too far to the right.

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                      • #12
                        Nice work! It is much better. You made good font choices and the condensed fonts allowed you to arrange stuff much better. The white space is much balanced and pleasing now.

                        I will just point out what I think are some very minor issues...

                        1. The line space between "You" and "Never" is different than every where else. 2. I think kerning is very slightly too wide between N & E, and too narrow between E & V in Never.
                        3. Between I & O in Impression the kerning is too wide.
                        4. The curve of "chance" is steeper than that of "nd" so the space grows narrower toward the end. I think the amount of curve should be the same.

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                        • #13
                          Her is a revision with the suggestions implemented. Thanks so much for the help, guys. A lot of what you're suggesting are things I'm either not seeing, or convincing myself I can get away with.

                          What do you think now?
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