not wanting to be penickity my love, but the AGA is swedish, not british [img]/DesktopModules/dotNetBB/emoticons/biggrin.gif[/img]
i'd also perhaps try it with a dark green band at the top behind the logo and copy and have the title line in white ? might compliment the red nicely. I say this purely because i associate aga with homely-ness, family and warmth, and it feels alittle white and minimal/cold.
when i was in britain, they called aga's an 'aga'. but who can afford them?!?
morea, i'm not keen on the way your body text is 'gap toothed', and the 'gauch' is just a little too cozy with your black line. also, i would not include your first period in your perenthesis. i would set it as 'cooker'. rather than 'cooker.'
why the black line at all? what about blocks of colour, or shifting the photo so that you don't need your line? just brainstorming here.
Aga's or Ranges have become pretty mainstream/trendy now, and aren't as expensive, or well made come to that, as they used to be lol! Still out of my price range (excuse the pun) though; i've just got a cooker!
Something about the green header doesn't look right/as good as the original. You're probably right about the stroke being the cause!
gap toothed - watch your leading and kerning. not that it's insanely out of whack, but the serif, black & white and space around your text brings to mind a zebra...confuses the eye. i can't read it. perhaps it's just on the screen though, so print it out and see what your eye does when you change all that around.
sorry - english is my second language today. the first being 'in-tongues'. (still recovering).
Thanks Ratkins, that's a good point. I have never been instructed to create a white ink and I only ever use Paper, I guess for some reason I was thinking of Paper as overprinting, when of course it knocks...