Need some opinions please

[Chris8920]

Hello everyone,

At college I was given a brief where we had to design a front cover and two double page spreads for designweek. The artwork was based on the building of my college and I messed about with it a little in illustrator as shown below. The spreads I did were bad at the time and I don't like them, I don't want to redo the spreads because I feel the content itself was boring. I think the piece would be better if it didn't have the massive designweek logo there and was on its own. However if I were to put it on its own is there anything I can do to it so that it makes sense in my portfolio?

The reason am I asking for help is because I'm putting my portfolio together.






I would appreciate anyone's opinion very much.

Kind Regards,

Chris

[Typically]

if you take the design week info off i think the artwork would lose its purpose. the artwork looks really cool imo, but as a stand alone piece it doesn't really show much design skill. if you want to put it in your portfolio you can always change it up to your liking.

[CCericola]

If it were a portfolio for an artist to show illustrations it is ok by itself. But I think for a GD portfolio you need to show how the graphic was used. I like it, although I'm not keen on the faded blue shapes in the background.

[becktesch]

I like the illustration as an art piece, but maybe the article title could relate better to the image? Like, make it about architecture, or navigating the urban jungle? I agree that it needs to look like a mag cover to show purpose and how it was used. I also agree that those 2 blue bands are out of place.

[Chris8920]

Thank you so much for your opinions, I appreciate it.

I definitely agree about the blue bands, I don't know why I added them at the time really.

I also moved it up slightly more vertically so it is more central in the magazine cover. I like the idea of creating a different article about architecture. I shall have a play around with that concept as it seems more interesting the current article which is about students opinions on their careers after college.

Just after I posted this and before I read any of your advice I decided to add it to a t-shirt as well. Not sure what you think.



http://www.designbyhumans.com/vote/detail/62289

I guess I could always add this to my folio as well as the magazine cover and double page spread. Personally I wouldn't wear the t-shirt, but in terms with the competition on the site I don't think it's too bad. Any thoughts?

Thanks again.

Edit: Apologies! I didn't want to add to many images to the page incase it took up too much loading but your right.

[garricks]

Chris, you should really post the t-shirt here rather than linking to it. It's easier for us to crit like that, and many members won't bother clicking on a link.