Hey everyone, a client of mine asked me to advertise his new gaming laptop so i thought the best way to advertise a gaming machine is with a game, so i came up with the following design.
All feedback is greatly appreciated.
Do you have permission from Ghost Of Tsushima? Are they in partnership with them? If not then you cannot use the image.
The processor is 3 years old. RAM has nothing to do with storage.
The graphics card is 5 years old.
$1200 is very steep price.
And is it just 1 type of computer this exact model?
Should the price be FROM $1200 depending on spec?
Can the spec be configured?
What’s the call to action? That little circle thing top right?
Why is ‘ave’ lower case?
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Very good point on tha copyright issue. Thank you very much for the heads up, i was just ignorant because the village i live in is pretty much off the map.
Do you know any platforms i can use to generate cool gamer looking cyberpunk-like characters?.
And about the other issues you advised me on, i will look into all of them, but for the price, $1200 is actually quite reasonable because getting that machine to my part of Africa is not at easy task. More than half of that is shipping cost.
What I like:
• Cool atmospheric imagery
• It’s well organized. I like how the specs are laid out so you can read them at a glance.
• I like how it is laid out. The image catches the eye and then you naturally go to the specs.
What I would change:
• Although the layout is nice, I think it could be improved. We read left to right. So I’d have the image on the left and the specs on the right.
• Having Conniverse at the top feels intrusive. Personally, I’d have a bar at the bottom that has that information.
• The chisel effect for the A15 looks a bit tacky.
Overall I think this is good. Some fine tuning would make it better, but to be honest I think it’s fine as it is.
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