Here are my thoughts.
The title slide and closing slide, at least in my opinion, does not give off a professional vibe. They look like you were just playing around with Illustrator’s gradients and blending modes and decided to go with it. Also, I am assuming the title slide and closing side are generic because you’re posting it on the forum. Otherwise, there is nothing there to identify who you are, where you are, what your goal is (looking for a job, looking for freelance work, looking for client work), and how to reach you.
Eggsalt Flour … this is tough, and I’ve been going back and forth on what to say about this. I feel like you’re on the cusp of having something really nice but the presentation is getting in the way. On page 2, the background photos and nice looking images, and I’ve used background images myself when presenting work, but I feel like they are distracting from the logo. What if you put a layer of black over the photos and set the opacity back to 75%? You’d still see the photos and get the vibe, but they’d be much less distracting. Page 3, just seems a little random. Is it a title slide? Is this part of the portfolio? On the envelope and letterhead page, the “letterhead” title is running way to close to the address on the envelope. Why are the eggs and salt so crisp and without texture here? This creates a disconnect from the other pieces. The packaging slide is nice. I really don’t have a problem there. On the print advertising, I feel like it needs the logo. It doesn’t have to be screaming big, maybe just as a signature on the bottom. Also on the ads, I would have liked to see the egg/salt/flour be varied from ad to ad. Right now, the three ads look a little static. On the social media, I feel like it’s visually appealing but it misses the mark on marketing. For example, on the Grand Opening and Honest & Ethical images, there is no clue what they’re for or who the company is. I like the logo you created, and I feel like the germ for a nice project is there, but it could be a home run if you put some more work into it.
Somewhat similar with uoi. It’s visually appealing. You show some nice type and color theory, but it fails to communicate. This could be a language or cultural thing. On the out-of-home ad, my eye is drawn to the yubari king melon. That’s the first thing I read. If I am walking by this in the real world, and I going to stop and do the work of figuring out why you’re talking about a melon, why I should care, who the ad is for, and then how to act upon the information? Probably not. Again, it’s visually appealing and I think you have a good eye, but it is lacking in the real-world selling department.
I’m sort of lukewarm at best on the typography posters, but I think the vector illustration work is nice.
I have to say this, I have not looked at a lot of portfolios of recent grads recently. Maybe what you are showing is par for the course (in terms of the work feeling a bit experimental and theoretical). Again, I think you have a good eye and show potential, but the projects and presentation needs some work before I’m going to say I’d hire you. The good news is that with the right work, you could have a much stronger presentation.
I hope this helps. It was meant to.